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Halfbrick Date: Sunday, 19-June-11, 21:19 | Message # 1
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At the front of the boat, Josh sat sheltering from the choppy water. He looked a little sick. The Captain spoke to him - "Private Smith, what's the matter?" In response, Josh vomited. We were nearly there. The ramp was lowered and we ran out. Instantly, there was a hail of machine-gun fire spraying from the cliff-face. We split into two groups. I dived into a hole in the beach and Josh and Ben joined me quickly. We just lay there, waiting. Men were screaming, dying, but the Eight were, as far as we knew, untouched. One of the twins found us - we didn't know which one, his face was so covered in mud. But then we left the beach and began to cross a field. We ran, but about two thirds of the way through there was the boom of a landing shell and Ben was flung into the air. He landed and lay motionless. We all knew it. Private Harrison was dead.

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
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smokeynova Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 07:24 | Message # 2
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That was cool! smile

FLAME ON!!!
 
Halfbrick Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:25 | Message # 3
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Thanks. I'm putting Part 2 up now, so hopefully a few things will be clarified.

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
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silverfoxmedia Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:29 | Message # 4
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Good. To be honest it dosen't flow that well, but it's very good all the same.
Well done!


"Great herd of elephants!"
 
Halfbrick Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:31 | Message # 5
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It's a bit of a rush-story, not intended to be detailed, just to provide an account of the action. Imagine the narrator dictates this twenty or thirty years after it happens. Their memory will have faded so it won't be perfectly detailed.

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
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silverfoxmedia Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:36 | Message # 6
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It's good. Very good.

"Great herd of elephants!"
 
Halfbrick Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:38 | Message # 7
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Thanks. I hope you like how it continues.

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
My youtube: http://www.youtube.com/user/HalfBrickStudios2010
 
silverfoxmedia Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 18:38 | Message # 8
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Yeah, I love it!

"Great herd of elephants!"
 
Halfbrick Date: Monday, 20-June-11, 21:29 | Message # 9
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Is that because you survive?

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
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silverfoxmedia Date: Tuesday, 21-June-11, 18:03 | Message # 10
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It's good, you see.

"Great herd of elephants!"
 
Halfbrick Date: Wednesday, 22-June-11, 22:58 | Message # 11
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Okay, the 'you see' catchphrase returns!

What up? I say "indeed" a lot.
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silverfoxmedia Date: Wednesday, 06-July-11, 17:41 | Message # 12
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Yeah, it does, you see!

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